tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5271551687505585331.post5369896358999054062..comments2022-11-03T03:11:58.470+13:00Comments on Collin: Halloween FactsPES Blogs 2013 Adminhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03043164228733682681noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5271551687505585331.post-65334241499688438702013-11-06T22:22:10.631+13:002013-11-06T22:22:10.631+13:00much better after you actually read out aloud the ...much better after you actually read out aloud the original and saw where you needed to correct a few things so proud of you attempting new ways of starting sentences to make the story/article sound interesting to the reader., keep it up and yes this one counts Collin!mumnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5271551687505585331.post-68113771685710994542013-11-05T21:23:27.582+13:002013-11-05T21:23:27.582+13:00very good son! remember the first couple of senten...very good son! remember the first couple of sentences in the beginning needed a few "?" - question marks as you were asking the reader a few things otherwise great effort remember to check and double check.mumnoreply@blogger.com